Guilt

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One of the strongest good qualities of this poem is how well you worked with short lines. You told a story and conveyed a message without any excess information to distract from the meaning of the poem. Very direct! <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/l/l…" width="19" height="19" alt="" title="La la la la"/>

I do recommend, though this is more a matter of a writer's style, to add question marks when a line is an interrogative sentence. Punctuation isn't necessary in poetry in most cases, but for a line that is asking a question like in the forth stanza and so on, it often looks more professional if a question mark is added. <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/n/n…" width="15" height="15" alt="" title="Nod"/>

Good work on this one! Keep writing!